Feedback please
 

Hey everyone. I have only posted one story here at the moment (an erotic story) . I am working on a second. I will even do a part 2 to my first Now I would just like some feedback on my first so I can get some idea as to what people thought of it.

Hi Mark, if I haven't said it before now ... Welcome to Pixies. It is always great to have new writers join us ...

Here's a suggestion that worked well for me when I first came to Pixies (under a different name than the one I post under now) ... I read stories by others and paid attention to the ones I thought were good as far as how they told their stories, learned from the things I liked. I also formed friendships with several of the writers and commented publicly and privately on what I liked about their stories, etc.

Sometimes the really GREAT storytellers have to wait a bit (sometimes a very LONG bit) to get any comments because the story they tell has done such a great job for the reader that they need recovery time!

And for those who would like to read Mark's story .... click here

An Erotic Story

fzzy did you actually read it though?

Yes, I did ... have you read any of mine?

yeah one of them at least. What did you think of mine? That is what I wanted to know the most

I read it. It's a good first try. Looking forward to seeing how your writing changes over time.